2011英语六级高分范文(四)
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　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Reserving a Seat. You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:　我要高分

　　1)很多大学里“占座”现象十分普遍

　　2)这种现象会带来哪些影响

　　3)你对此的看法

　　Reserving a Seat

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　　行文思路

　　本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点要求分析该现象带来的影响，提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”对该现象的看法。

　　根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述大学生在教室和图书馆“占座”的现象;阐述这种现象带来的不良影响;谈谈“我”对“占座”现象的看法。

　　高分范文

　　Reserving a Seat

　　We often see there is a table-cloth, a book or something else on the desk in the classroom or library, [1]indicating the seat is taken. This kind of phenomenon is very usual in almost all colleges and universities. [2]Strangely enough, most of students seem to [3]take this for granted, and few will protest it.

　　[4]Though most of students’ taking seats in advance is for the purpose of better study, this kind of phenomenon has great negative effects. [5]On the one hand, it is a selfish behavior, which damages other students’ interests. [6]Even if many students come to the classroom very early, they can not find a seat. [5]On the other hand, reserving a seat [7]violates the rule of fairness. [8]No matter how late you come to class, the seat is still reserved for you [6]even though many others are eager for that seat.

　　[9]Considering the above-mentioned, I think, [10]it is high time that we college students took a good look of our behavior. [5]Indeed, only if all of us can improve our consciousness, it is not a difficult task for us to get rid of this kind of phenomenon “reserving a seat”.

　　【亮点点评】

　　[1]“表示”，现在分词短语作伴随状语。

　　[2]“非常奇怪的是”，副词使用恰当。

　　[3]“认为…理所当然”。

　　[4]though引导让步状语从句，引出对不良影响的阐述。

　　[5]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。

　　[6]even if/ even though引导让步状语从句。

　　[7]“违背了公平原则”。

　　[8]“no matter +疑问词”表示“无论，不管”，引导让步状语从句。

　　[9]用于得出结论。considering用作介词，意为“考虑到，鉴于”。

　　[10]用于引出解决办法，表示解决问题的紧迫性,常译为“早该是…的时候了”。

　　佳句临摹

　　1.佳句：Even if many students come to the classroom very early, they can not find a seat.

　　临摹：即使要花费更多的钱，父母仍然愿意送他们的独生子女去更好的学校。